ALPER SUNAÇOĞLU
In this article, I’ll introduce you Alper Sunaçoğlu who is not
well-known but has an increadible career
as a sportsman especially in swimming
with his numerous medals and recors worldwide as well as in other sport fields.
He has great accomplishments and represented our country successfully in many
areas. Alper Sunaçoğlu was born in 1973, in İstanbul. He started swimming when
he was 5 years old, and has broken a lot of records in many tracks in swimming.
Besides swimming, he continues to do acrobatic parachute, paragliding,
scuba,far east sports, and triathlon and modern pentathlon both profesionally
and being licenced. He has many medals in swimming triathlon and military
pentathlon; in addition, he has numerous
accomplishments in international platforms. To begin with on 4-5 September 2010, he
swam from Anamur-Mersin to Girne-Kıbrıs in 26 hours 15 minutes, in other words,
the whole Meditarrinean, non-stop without a cage which save sportsmen from any
attack of sharks or any other dangers in the sea, and he broket he world
record. Although the distance is normally 78 km, with the flow and deviations,
it was about 95 km. The previous record holder fort he same distance
wasnational swimmer Ersin Aydın who swam
it in 34 hours and 45 minutes with a cage. On 23 April 2011, he made another
first accomplishment in the world history being the first person who swim the whole
Bosporus. Bathing from the Sarıyer, he swam along a track about 30 km in 2 hours an 25 minutes accompanied with 2 referee, 3 trainers, and a lot of native and foreign press. This record attempt was broadcasted by a foreign channel in 36 different country. Apart from these, he had also some record attemts which had to be cancelled due to some financial or political reasons. In the future he plans to represent our country in FINA GRAND PRIX OPEN-WATER contests in 8 different contries and 8 different distances if efficent financial support is provided.
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